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Brittaney 'Britainy' Gurr
Professor Melinda Schroeder
ENG101
October 5, 2015
Blog Post #2
Where the Sea Meets the Sand
Almost a year ago, I went to a place that my soul could escape. A place where I could be free.
For me, there is no freer place than standing in the ocean. The place that I went to is so much more
than that . The water was cool, but yet warm enough to just sit in. The sun never hid it's face, and
warmed the sand as long as daylight continued.
The coastal breeze whipped through my hair and the
The coastal breeze whipped through my hair and the
smell of salt water wafted through my senses, energizing my whole being. Succulents abounded
throughout the streets as ground cover, palm trees spread their arms wide as if to welcome you to this paradise.
The people were all friendly and seemed to genuinely care about those around them.
Everyone was very aware, but at the same time, gave other people their space.
Space to breathe. A place to heal. Which was exactly what I needed.
I needed a place where the water
I needed a place where the water
was blue, but ran white with passion, as it hit the shore. A place where the sand feels like home, no
matter where you step. A place where as I absorbed the sunlight, I could absorb the power of the
stillness. This particular little spot of the ocean and it's surrounding community is everything that I
strive to be. Happy, self-sufficient, strong, welcoming, creative, unique, beautiful- inside and out,
peaceful, loving and loveable, ever-changing, always growing, respectful and bursting with life.
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>>My Responses<<
http://jennicasblog123.blogspot.com/2015/10/a-favorite-place.html?showComment=1444113419296#c3664885890238707363
http://cathys101.blogspot.com/2015/10/blog-post-2.html?showComment=1444113105960#c121480063176028520
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>>My Responses<<
http://jennicasblog123.blogspot.com/2015/10/a-favorite-place.html?showComment=1444113419296#c3664885890238707363
http://cathys101.blogspot.com/2015/10/blog-post-2.html?showComment=1444113105960#c121480063176028520
Good job! You did a really great job of emphasizing how this place makes you feel and what it means to you. I think you could have gone into a little more detail with the sounds you heard here, just to strengthen that area of the writing. Overall you did really well!
ReplyDeleteReally nice job on your post Brittany! For your personal narrative, I would suggest adding in what you hear in addition to the other four senses. Your description of what you saw at that place is amazing! It easily painted a picture in my head of where you were. Overall very well done! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! I should have added in the sound of crashing waves but I left it out because the peacefulness of this place kind of just muted out noise, in my mind.
ReplyDeleteVery nice Britainy! I definitely was able to lean into your description and feel like I could easily be "there"... My favorite line: "I needed a place where the water
ReplyDeletewas blue, but ran white with passion, as it hit the shore".
Excellent descriptions! I love how you took us there, to that place, and made it your own. You used excellent imagery and really worked with the show vs. tell. Nice post.
ReplyDeleteAwesome descriptions! I could feel the sun shining down on me, and the wind blowing through my air. This place seems like a really relaxing spot. I really liked the line
ReplyDelete"I needed a place where the water was blue, but ran white with passion, as it hit the shore." I can just see the waves. great post! (: I also really enjoy your photo!
Great post Brittaney, you used some great vocabulary and embraced your feelings; your emotion poured out into this post splendidly. I look forward to reading more as the quarter continues.
ReplyDeleteYour description is beautiful. The feelings you use allow the reader to realize the depth of emotions you experience here . I can almost hear the waves and feel the water on my feet.
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